Changes between Version 5 and Version 6 of Private/RefereeComments/Language

Timestamp:

Oct 9, 2013, 10:06:41 AM (11 years ago)

Author:

Michele Selvaggi

Comment:

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Private/RefereeComments/Language

@@ -194 +194 @@
 Title : no hyphen between ”tau” and ”jets”
 
+>>> addressed
+
 L1: ”Identifying” is bad. ”tau-lepton” should be ”tau”. ”flavor” should be ”flavour”.
 
+>>> addressed
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 L2: No hyphen between ”c” and ”quarks”. ”Crucial” should be ”important”. ”experiment” should be ”experiments”
+
+>>> addressed
 
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@@ -207 +213 @@
 the authors want to replace it by ”b, tau” ?
 
+>>> addressed
+
 L6: ”is wrongly” should be ”be wrongly” (subjunctive is in order here).
 
+>>> addressed
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 === Section 3.3 ===
 
 L(N-1) : ”particle-flow candidates” is an undefined concept at this level.
 
+>>> addressed
+
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@@ -220 +232 @@
 L1: ”residual” should be ”neutral”
 
+>>> addressed
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 L3: ”automatically” : it is not clear what the meaning of ”automatically”.
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+>>> addressed
 
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@@ -231 +247 @@
 common” ? How about ”most copious” ?
 
+>>> addressed
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 L4: ”two jets originating from one b quark” is possible, but is probably
 not what the authors want to say.
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+>>> addressed
 
 L6: ”the hadronic top-mass” 
@@ -241 +261 @@
 reconstruct” is bad too.
 
+>>> addressed
+
 Par 2:
 
 L1: ”center” should be ”centre”
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+>>> addressed
 
 L5: I am not sure that the ”DELPHESANALYSIS” package is relevant
 for the clarity of the paper.
 
+>>> addressed
+
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@@ -255 +281 @@
 of a b quark” would be better.
 
+>>> addressed
+
 L5: ”criteria” should be ”criterion”.
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+>>> addressed
 
 L8: While I have no doubt that the signal selection is sensible, I guess
 that the authors want to say ”sensitive”.
 
+>>> addressed
+
 L9: Drop ”slight”.
 
+>>> addressed
+
 L10: ”efficiencies value” should be ”efficiency”
 
+>>> addressed
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 Figure 7, 8, ... : ”ref.” should be ”Ref.”
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+>>> addressed
 
 === Section 7.2 ===
@@ -278 +316 @@
 I would like to re-iterate the suggestion to ask a native English speaker to read and fix the paper throughout.
 
+>>> addressed
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@@ -283 +323 @@
 
 L1: ”figure 10” should be ”Fig. 10”
+
+>>> jhep manual says abbreviation on "figure" should be avoided.