Changes between Version 3 and Version 4 of Private/RefereeComments/Language

Timestamp:

Oct 8, 2013, 10:47:30 AM (11 years ago)

Author:

Michele Selvaggi

Comment:

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Private/RefereeComments/Language

@@ -8 +8 @@
 invited to look for all instances of ”hadronic calorimeter” and modify ac-
 cordingly. [This comment is not repeated for other occurrences.]
+
+>>> addressed
 
 Line 5: ”allows to produce collections” is not proper english. Replace
@@ -15 +17 @@
 [This comment is not going to be repeated for the other sections.]
 
+>>> addressed when needed. It is however correct to say:
+"allows the user to store collections ..", see http://sentence.yourdictionary.com/allow
+
 Line 5: The word ”collections” appears out of context here, and carries
 no meaning to the casual reader.
+
+>>> changed to "physics objects"
 
 PAGE 2
@@ -29 +36 @@
 be repeated for the other sections.
 
+>>> addressed
+
 Third paragraph:
 
@@ -35 +44 @@
 at a start of a sentence.
 
+>>> DELPHES is neither an acronym nor an abbreviation; it is therefore fine to start a sentence with it.
+
 L1: No hyphen between ”data” and ”format”. Actually, ”data-format”
 can be dropped altogether without losing information.
+
+>>> addressed, "data-format" 
 
 L4: ”final observables” of photons and leptons is jargon, and carries lit-
@@ -42 +55 @@
 energy” ?
 
+>>> addressed
+
 L5: ”the relevant sub-detectors” is also very much unclear. How about
 simply ”the detector resolution”
 
+>>> addressed
+
 L6: ”High-level reconstructed quantities such as” carries little meaning to
 the casual reader. The sentence would read better without it.
+
+>>> addressed
 
 L7: Why are ”calorimeter deposits” qualified as ”simple” ? Suggest to
 drop it. Why is the ”particle-flow algorithm” qualified as ”so-called” ? Sug-
 gest to drop it.
+
+>>> changed, not relevant anymore. 
 
 Fourth paragraph:
@@ -232 +253 @@
 
 L1: ”figure 10” should be ”Fig. 10”
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